This is the start to a good idea. The bass gets a little bit repetitious, and it kind of drowns out all of the other melodic elements in the mix. The transition at 1:50, too, is very sudden and the change in overall volume doesn't feel justified. But, the drums that come in about 20 seconds later are fun, and I liked that.
I'm not against loud songs, I love a good noisy song, but I think this song could do well to manage the variation in loudness between elements to make sure everything fits in the mix right. Like at the end, I just straight up cannot hear the lead at all.
So, it's not bad, but it could use some work to really hit the mark.